Journal #9

Theme- stay at home fathers
Primary text- modern family
Secondary-glee

Intro-  I will talk about how now a days our society's views have changed. I will talk deeper into how families have have two fathers now or two mothers instead of the standard mother and father. Later I will relate and introduce the texts I chose.
Thesis- Stay at home fathers were a very unusual thing until now things are changing, and the texts modern family and glee introduce how gay couples take a large role in our society.

Modern Family:
The two guys that had the daughter acted as if they were a normal married couple (because they were), but it is very different to see on the television. The fact that the media is making shows about this is almost promoting that it is okay to have a family like this, allowing younger kids who are going to watch it think that it might be a right thing to do. The two guys are the target in this film.

Glee:
 I will talk about how a large majority of the kids in the choir group were gay, and even if they weren't it was very much accepted. The lesbian cheerleaders and the gay guy hitting on the new guy is an example I could use as it being very normal in there high school. I want to mention how the audience might think that it is a normal thing to have gay couples in television shows and might even attract gay viewers, and take viewers away from it. Unlike modern family where there is multiple family situations, some of the glee audience might be turned away since it is greatly focused on the gays.

Journal #8

The descriptive language helped me shape my text into an overall exciting essay, but the diction and word choice did as well.

correction- The descriptive language, diction and word choice all helped me shape my tezxt into an overall exciting essay.

 Being so homesick in England, airsickness was a very strong word that related to being left alone. 

correction- After starting to feel homesick on my trip, hearing the word "airsickness' hit me very deep because it reminded me of the feeling of being alone.

Another thing that can completely change your persona, is your audience.

correction- Another example that can change you persona would be your audience.

Through out my trip to studying abroad, I learned that it is okay to be afraid and alone.

correction- Though out my trip I learned that it is OK to feel scared and alone.

After analyzing two different texts, I learned the way I was writing was for a certain audience

correction- I learned that I was writing for a certain audience once I read two different types of texts.

 When writing for a professional audience who I am trying to impress, I change my persona and identity as a writer hoping they accept me.

correction-I change my persona and identity as a writer for either a professional audience or a higher authority.

It is a terrible feeling getting sick on an airplane, and that is why I relate these dry heaves back to being homesick.

correction- When you get sick you dry heave and it is the most miserable feeling in the world and that is why I relate this feeling.

When writing this essay, . The descriptive language changes the whole perspective for viewers.

correction- The descriptive language helps viewers get a perspective on what the essay is about.

You can tell the difference in my writing when I am casually writing to a friend or if I am trying to impress someone. 

correction- When I am writing to a friend or writing to a teacher, you can always tell the difference.

After relating a personal story to my text however, really helped me see how certain diction and language can mean so much more.

correction- Relating a personal story to my text really allowed me to see how my diction and language can mean so much more.

After reading "Rules for Writers", I took Diane Hackers advice by correcting many of my sentences. When ever I used the word "where" I would fill that with the actual place that I was talking about. Instead of using many commas, I made the sentence flow a lot easier with out them. After reading the Hacker advice, I learned that most of the time you dont always catch your mistake. It helped a lot.